"29 = C (one mark from a B!)"
Some very good points and confident use of media language. Clear understanding shown.
You're in a great position for November of the AS course - now we need to add the depth and detail for the top grades.
More specific reference to the clip and more complex use of media language (low key lighting, for example)
Editing is a weakness: A lot of your points drift to camerawork. Think pace, juxtaposition, eyeline match and transitions.